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Comments Thank you for the lovely critique, darling!
 I agree that this is not my best poem.  I actually suffered from a flash of writer's block when I sat down to write this. Sadly, if I did not enter this round for the contest at all - I would have felt worse.  The good thing about bad poetry, however; is that we learn from our mistakes. That is the true reason I appreciate your critique.   *OfOneSoul You're very welcome^^
 Haha xD aahh Writer's Block =w= That lovely thing. . . Well it's understandable  Writer's Block isn't something to be happy about of course xD But I do commend you for writing while you have one ^^ Most people tend to not force themselves to write. . Like me xDAnd yes~!  Learning from mistakes is good ^^ Aww well I am glad to know that critiques I make are of use to some people Poet  Writing while having writer's block is incredibly painful, to say the least.  But you're right; at least I made it through it.  Haha I can relate. . It's like purposefully giving yourself a headache in hopes of maybe writing something worthwhile. . If not that, inducing a headache purposefully so you can write about how much the headache hurts xD Even then, that doesn;t work most times xD
Haha~! Glad to hear~! So then I assume you aren't in a Writers Block anymore? Thanks for the watch by the way~! ^^ You're welcome, dearie!
And thank you for the return watch. And I think I was only suffering because of that one poem. The theme was so loose and I felt I was forcing myself to create something. Still, I'm glad I made it.  |
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Sadly it doesn't work for me. . .
All it takes is a little inspiration. 
First of I would like to say that the image was good. Though it was a little shaky here and there, for instance the beginning. I couldn't really grasp an image from them, but as the poem went on the image got a little better.
I found the occasional font change of words interesting yet a little distracting at the same time. I would read your poem and come across the change and get drawn to that for a moment before returning to read again, but that's enough time for me to forget a bit of what I was reading. Though it was an interesting change, not entirely a bad thing.
The technique and format you used was interesting to say the least. The plot and theme of this piece was received well with little distractions and breaks in the flow.
I am not so sure about the impact though, I got the point of the poem, it just didn't do wonders for me. It's not an "Oh wow this was spectacular!" But it was enough to satisfy me a little.
But overall good job!